I need to figure what Wu would say to Nolan trying to reason with him and pleading for his life as Nolan revealed that he, Claire and her nephews will watched as the I-rex will take out everyone the park. Then, they will join them. I got what Nolan and Torres would say to Wu after hitting him.
Nolan: "I will enjoy sending you to that fucking abomination you and your fucking lab guys created, Dr. Godzilla."
Torres: "Yeah, you're going to get what's coming soon. Before that, we will blow up your precious secret lab and reveal the names of your conspirators."
Okay, anyway. I'll be writing the last section of chapter 21. It will have Owen arriving in the area where the trapdoor to the abandoned tunnels. He would check in with Lowery and Chelsea. Lowery tells Owen the trapdoor is hidden in the trees not far where he is at. As Owen sees the trapdoor, he asked Chelsea the status of the repairs. Chelsea says that she needs a few more minutes to get the console fixed. Owen tells her, "We don't exactly have a few minutes." After finishing some more radio talk to Lowery and Chelsea, Charlie arrives and just stares at him. Then Blue joins in. As they looked at Owen, Delta and Echo arrived and looked like they would attack Owen, but Blue and Charlie convinced Delta and Echo to let Owen be their alpha again with some snarls, growls and such. Owen then comes up with an idea to get the terrorists in the Innovation Center.
I added some more ideas for chapters 20 to 22 in my sandbox. I want your input on how Nolan, Claire, Wang and others would react to the secret lab Wu used to create the Indominus rex as a living military weapon in chapter 21. I think Claire's reaction at the part on 1:16 to 1:18 on this video would be used for something that Nolan says about while looking at the lab or something along those lines. Nolan probably would order Torres, Smith and Wang to take pictures of the lab and that they will destroy it once the mission's done and question in frustration with a remark as seen on this video of the film Armageddon in a Bruce Willis tone. Owen and Blue (who already rekindle their bond) would try to get Delta, Echo and Charlie to listen to Owen again. What else do you think should happen in chapters 21-22, maybe 20 also?
Okay, one critique I have for one part of your story in Chapter 5 was where Joshua taunts the Carnotaurus in a comedic way, which I find unnecessary since the humor wouldn't fit in the serious tone of the scene of the Carnotaurus trio. The "aw come on" line seems a little off, so maybe rewrite it to be more mature like this? "Oh, sh---". Does that work?
Also, maybe Ember couldn't easily kill the Carnotaurus he was attacking due to the thick skin of the Carnotaurus, and maybe Joshua could give Ember some food when they run away from the Carnotaurus trio, but that's just my thought.
So I was thinking about a lot of my stories and their quality in my eyes and how people would react to them, like the dialogue and structure of Rebuilding Jurassic World and the concept of my Splatoon story.
You know what they say; "A piece of art's biggest critic is the creator of that art", and I have a lot of things in my mind regarding my own works, and I'm particularly concerned about my Splatoon story and how people would react to this fanfiction. Especially with the releases of films like the Sonic movie and Detective Pikachu film.
For my Splatoon story, my goal with it was to bring my own style to an animated franchise without losing the core of the game franchise, so I have to come up with a good story that's faithful to the plot of the original game with some new things in it, with the characters being interesting and compelling, and I have to imagine the balance for the characters between being faithful to their game counterparts and being realistic.
Originally, I said that my Inkling design would be based off of some realistic Inkling fanart which humanized their proportions and faces, so I tried to be faithful by keeping the black eye masks, ears, head tentacles, and teeth from their game counterparts, but for the realistic aspect, I made the hands and feet more cephalopod tentacle-like and coloring the color and gradient tip of the hands, arms, feet, and legs the same color as their head tentacles, because one, it's to give them a unique feel from their inspiration source, two, it's to show off their more cephalopodian side, since they evolved from squids, and three, it’s to make them look less like a human cosplaying as an Inkling. I'm planning to remove the three pairs of smaller arms under their two main arms because it would look weird on the design.
My main concern is how people who read this description would think of the design. On one hand, they may like it because it stayed a little more faithful to the original design, and on the other, they could hate it and say to change the design to the original and make it animated instead of live action. I personally imagine, for my fanfiction, Raf Grassetti, the Art director for God of War 2018, to do the designs, because I trust him in that he can make the realistic designs work because if you check out his Instagram account, he made amazing models for characters from Super Smash Bros. Ultimate, which is something similar to what I’m imagining here for my Splatoon story.
Just wanted to throw this out there, since this is what I had in my mind for quite some time.
Well, I think that your design will most likely be well received, the reason being because it’s a new, and creative design off of what they already love and know. So I think making them more Cephalopod-like makes it more intriguing, because it represents a new phase in it’s species advancement, that thing probably being wanted to be seen by fans.
I think the reason best way to judge it, is to see what reception the fan art got that your get inspiration from. That’s my two cents, so I hope that helps.
Thanks, but there’ll be people that wanted the original design or dislike the new design. You know how Nintendo is strict with their IPs, and of course this is all just a fanfiction and not an actual planned film, but at least this can look good compared to the original Sonic design, which not only looked way too different, but also uncanny to some extent.
Yeah, it’s just that I’m honestly very nervous to the changes I make from the source material of Splatoon, hence why I made it take place in Inkopolis and have my redesign take elements from the Nintendo design. I just want my story to be really good.
Thanks. It’s just that I travel YouTube often, and I see comments regularly about this topic regarding the Sonic movie and the DP film, including some comments that say they support a company’s rights to bring their own style to an established character, and others say how the character should stay the same, and all that, which made me start this conversation in the first place.
I’m reading some Sonic movie original design videos right now, explaining that they humanized Sonic too much. For my Inkling design, I humanized the body and the face because the Nintendo Inkling already had human-like proportions, and the semi-humanizing can be done because of realistic fanart of Inklings where they showed something similar, whereas Sonic does not, which led to the backlash on the original Sonic, among other features of the original Sonic design.
And yeah, this whole concept really is a risky take for the Splatoon franchise, considering the consensus that live action films usually based off of animated properties are bad, exist for money, and ruin what made those properties great to start with. If I plan up a really good story that has to do with Splatoon (I’m developing it right now) with good characters and their designs, this can work. I mean, when the Pokémon for DP were first revealed, people at first didn’t like it until they got used to it. When Genie was first revealed for the Aladdin remake, his design got as much hate as you would expect, yet it was the CGI that needed improvement.
Also, I wondered about Josh’s role. I’m trying to predict some criticisms, and one of them will be “what is Josh’s purpose in this story? He could be left out.”, and I have to come up with a reason for Josh’s involvement, not just with the story (even though the other Splatoon characters should have more screen time because it’s Splatoon), but also with the whole concept overall. There is a lore in Splatoon that says humans went extinct 10,000 years ago, so having Josh cryogenized could work, but I need to make him have a reason to be there.
Sorry for doubleposting, but I just wondered, how did you manage to make Malchom Woods a FANDOM hit? Did you went to the main place of it all, Community Central, and promoted it there?
Also, I just wanted to tell you that RockyDaMann, a user I know, is helping me out in my Splatoon story, as well as in my RJW story alongside BattleshipMan. What are your thoughts on the comment above this one?
Okay, so for my Splatoon story, I’ll change some things about the first chapter which I already wrote to make it better in my eyes. I’m also coming up with a retitle, other than “Splatoon LA Movie”. What should it be?
Well, from what I’ve seen of the title of other Splatoon fanfictions, like “Splatoon: The Legacy Of Humanity” (I might read that soon), I could have used a new original title to make my story unique. But hey, “Splatoon” works for now.
Also, I wanted to ask about another topic that I wanted to share with you; the involvement of Clementine Lanark and Whinter Castello, both created by TamarinFrog.
Originally, both of them were from a comic by TamarinFrog named “Cafe Cardarami Tales”, which was an amazing series with epic art, and TamarinFrog reused them again for her original series, “Bottled Up”, which, while it isn’t complete as of yet, looks great so far. Since I am a fan of her comics, I decided to use Clementine and Whinter for my story, and I did credit her, but as of lately, I wasn’t sure if I should borrow her characters due to originality purposes. RockyDaMann told me to keep them for my story, since it would be a waste if I replaced them with OC Inklings of my own, but what do you think? Should I make my story dedicated to her?
Thanks. Hopefully while you're at it, you'll find a great one.
Anyways, any other plans for future Malchom Woods?
And one more thing, have you been reading Rebuilding Jurassic World lately. If you have, I can hire you as one of my executive producers, alongside BattleshipMan and RockyDaMann and what ideas you can give me for RJW, as well as me currently rewriting Episode 2.
I have been imagining about something for my Splatoon film.
You know about the Sonic movie’s second trailer where they changed Sonic’s design and showed that the film may be better than we all thought? Well, it used the song “Blitzkrieg Bop” by the Ramones, and I got the thought in my head that combining that soundtrack with Splatoon’s “Splattack” soundtrack could be really great to imagine for my fanfiction. For me, Blitzkrieg Bop already fits with Splatoon’s theme, so I can think of a combination between the two songs would be really good.