I need to figure what Wu would say to Nolan trying to reason with him and pleading for his life as Nolan revealed that he, Claire and her nephews will watched as the I-rex will take out everyone the park. Then, they will join them. I got what Nolan and Torres would say to Wu after hitting him.
Nolan: "I will enjoy sending you to that fucking abomination you and your fucking lab guys created, Dr. Godzilla."
Torres: "Yeah, you're going to get what's coming soon. Before that, we will blow up your precious secret lab and reveal the names of your conspirators."
Okay, anyway. I'll be writing the last section of chapter 21. It will have Owen arriving in the area where the trapdoor to the abandoned tunnels. He would check in with Lowery and Chelsea. Lowery tells Owen the trapdoor is hidden in the trees not far where he is at. As Owen sees the trapdoor, he asked Chelsea the status of the repairs. Chelsea says that she needs a few more minutes to get the console fixed. Owen tells her, "We don't exactly have a few minutes." After finishing some more radio talk to Lowery and Chelsea, Charlie arrives and just stares at him. Then Blue joins in. As they looked at Owen, Delta and Echo arrived and looked like they would attack Owen, but Blue and Charlie convinced Delta and Echo to let Owen be their alpha again with some snarls, growls and such. Owen then comes up with an idea to get the terrorists in the Innovation Center.
It involves Owen and the raptors reaching the Innovation Center. As the helicopters arrives in the USS Abraham Lincoln with Barry, Vivian and the others in the control room, soldiers wait by the Southeast area of Main Street which is sealed off by Quadtosaurus, Owen lets the raptors take out some terrorists in the lobby of the Innovation Center while Owen kills several others. Nolan and the others heard the commotion. Realizing Owen is in the Innovation Center, Nolan orders Cullen to kill Claire, Zach and Gray. With Claire working to free herself, Gray distracts Cullen with his begging for his life trick at her. Once Claire freed herself, she stabs Cullen in the leg and causing Zach & Gray to get away. After a brief fight, Claire stabs Cullen with the glass, killing her and she goes to her nephews. Owen and the raptors would take out more terrorists as Chelsea works to repair the console that had Quadtosaurus on it.
I'm on the part where Owen and his raptors are arriving at the passageway exit to leads to the Innovation Center. What I got so far is Owen checks in with Lowery and Lowery says that he is close to the exit of the passageway tunnel that leads to the diner in the lobby floor of the Innovation Center. Cox then says to Owen that Garnett and several other Navy SEALs & SAS soldiers are at the southeast entry of Main Street, waiting to evacuate the hostages once Quadtosaurus is activated. Owen asked Chelsea about the status of repairs of the console that has Quadtosaurus and she replied that she still need few minutes to repair it. Owen would urge her to hurry up because the lives of Claire, her nephews and everyone in the park depends on it. Then he would kill one of the terrorists coming out to check the tunnels. The raptor made some quiet noises about it. Then Owen said to Lowery that when it's time, shut off the power to the lobby of the Innovation Center. Lowery acknowledged.
What dialogue do you think would be believable in that scene?
I added more of the final showdown against the terrorists.
I'm gonna need some help with dialogue ideas for Gray's feign begging at Cullen to buy Claire some time to cut herself free. Then when Claire breaks free and fights Cullen, eventually killing her by stabbing her with a shard of glass, saying an decent one-liner for her.
Just remove Gray’s “I have an idea” line and just write that he came up with an idea, hearing from Claire’s and Cullen’s confrontation about Cullen’s son.
Gray: “What are you doing?”
Cullen: “Just following orders, kid.”
Gray: “Wait, what do you mean?!”
[Cullen grabs Gray]
Zach: “Let him go! Let him go!!NO!!!
[Claire watches in sudden horror]
[Cullen pulls out gun, Gray starts to cry]
Cullen: “Shut up! I’m doing this only for the best! I don’t give a damn about you or your family! Especially your aunt!!!”
Gray: “What about your son..?“
[Cullen slaps Gray violently, Zach reacts strongly and Claire hurries to free herself]
Cullen: “DON’T bring him up now!!! He’s dead, and it’s your aunt’s fault he’s dead!!!”
[Gray cries, trying to come up with some words]
Gray: “If... [sniffs]... if he w-was me... how would you feel...?”
[Cullen pauses, realizing what she’s doing right now; yelling at Gray and about to kill him, when she lost her son, and is stunned at Gray’s words defining her at almost becoming just like Nolan]
[Claire finally breaks free, lunges at Cullen, shoving her which results in Gray being let go from Cullen’s grasp, and Claire slashes Cullen’s right side of her face and stabs her right eye with the shard of glass]
Cullen: “AHHH!!! MY EYE!!! MY EYE!!!
[Claire and Cullen brawl, as the former loses the shard of glass, and they fight over Cullen’s gun for some time, smashing each other through equipment as Cullen fires her gun sporadically, with one bullet directed at Claire’s foot)
Claire: “Get away... FROM THEM!!!
[Claire, with all of her fury, points Cullen’s gun (which Cullen has in her hand and is fighting extremely strongly over) at Cullen’s chest, and Cullen pulls the trigger to fire her last shot, only for the bullet to be shot into Cullen’s lung, ending the fight. Claire steps back in horror at what she’s done, with Cullen stepping backwards and then falling into an upright sitting position against a wall. Blood is let out of her nose and mouth as she struggles to breath, but for some time, her head droops to the side]
I wanted to go for a more dramatic angle, and have Cullen realize her flawed ways (her about to kill Gray which would be ironic because she joined Extinct All Dinosaurs to avenge her son) right before her end.
I added some more ideas for chapters 20 to 22 in my sandbox. I want your input on how Nolan, Claire, Wang and others would react to the secret lab Wu used to create the Indominus rex as a living military weapon in chapter 21. I think Claire's reaction at the part on 1:16 to 1:18 on this video would be used for something that Nolan says about while looking at the lab or something along those lines. Nolan probably would order Torres, Smith and Wang to take pictures of the lab and that they will destroy it once the mission's done and question in frustration with a remark as seen on this video of the film Armageddon in a Bruce Willis tone. Owen and Blue (who already rekindle their bond) would try to get Delta, Echo and Charlie to listen to Owen again. What else do you think should happen in chapters 21-22, maybe 20 also?